Slowly I walked into the lab that looks like a huge bubble and golf balls suddenly I started to laugh it can be all sorts of things. My mum says you get a dollar because you are not boring like your brother.
"Say what?" My brother said. " mum are you telling tales again?"
"No!" Mum replied."When we get home you just bought a ticket to your room."
"Wow, I love the lab Matilda. Is is your lab for school?"yes mum I love building inventions maybe so doz my sister Emma I love to walk so I put a running shoe on her.
By Devan
Hi Devan,
ReplyDeleteI like that you describe the lab as looking like a huge bubble and golf balls - makes it sound very interesting.
You have used speech marks really well and it moves your story along - you have also put in lots of exclamation and question marks, very good.
Keep writing!
Rachel Wills (team 100WC)
thank you i put a lot of cool stuff in it
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